Nightwalking (title change, edit #3.2 (Todd)

[FractalPacifist]

Oooh, I love a good villanelle! This format is close to my heart, although I'm terrible at keeping mine from sounding cheesy. v_v

Thoughts:

Maybe try switching A1 (danced upon my windowsill) and A2 (moonlight's trail 'cross waters still)? I think it would help the first stanza make a bit more sense.

Overall, I like the visuals here, although I found some of the poem a bit confusing. Comments below ^_^

danced upon my windowsill maybe try "dancing" instead?
through strung and slatted wooden blinds
moonlight's trail 'cross waters still I dislike the shortning of "across," it sounds a bit contrived.

midnight's gleam, a room to fill
through a crack a moonbeam finds this line is a bit jolty. maybe find a different way to refer to "moonbeam" to keep from repeating the word "moon" so much? since it's in A2, it's making quite a few appearances.
danced upon my windowsill

bringing dreams to jolt and thrill if there's no sleep tonight, why are you dreaming?/b]
the sparkling path on ripples winds
moonlight's trail 'cross waters still

seeking strength and finding will [b]I feel like you're missing a chance to use the rhyme with "will" to start off a sentence that continues on the next line.
new plans drawn from hearts and minds This line also feels created just for the rhyme.
danced upon my windowsill

with owl's hoot and barn wren's trill barn wrens exist? cool!
connecting to this earth that binds I love this line.
moonlight's trail 'cross waters still

illuminate white wing and bill try "illuminating" to fit with the tense of the rest of the piece
swans' grace sails through life's groans and grinds "grinds" feels weird when juxtaposed with "swan's grace."
danced upon my windowsill
moonlight's trail 'cross waters still