10-04-2013, 03:37 PM
Hi, FP, thanks so much for your comments. So many of them are just what I need, the words become familiar to me and I lose what sounds forced, thanks for pointing them out.
I laughed at your dreams... no sleep comment, caught by a title again. I tack them on to post and I really suck at them.
I like your idea of swapping lines, I'll see what happens, thanks.
You may have missed my 'tis debacle, people hate these words, I actually used whilst once, okay, maybe not so good, but I go 'cross the street all the time. I'll think on it.
Illuminating changed on my last edit, I'll try to figure that one out too. Oh, and I like swan vs grinds, I'll check how it reads.
Again, I'll surely consider all your notes. Thanks for taking the time.
I laughed at your dreams... no sleep comment, caught by a title again. I tack them on to post and I really suck at them.
I like your idea of swapping lines, I'll see what happens, thanks.
You may have missed my 'tis debacle, people hate these words, I actually used whilst once, okay, maybe not so good, but I go 'cross the street all the time. I'll think on it.
Illuminating changed on my last edit, I'll try to figure that one out too. Oh, and I like swan vs grinds, I'll check how it reads.
Again, I'll surely consider all your notes. Thanks for taking the time.
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