10-11-2013, 10:41 PM
Well, I've tried Fractal's suggestion of swapping lines to make a bit more sense, and Erthona's to stopping trying to make sense and let the fantasy run.
Oh, and dumped that bad title, this one's for Todd.
I'd appreciate any input on whether this works any better, and where the rough spots are.
Thanks so much for the fun of playing with this.
Oh, and dumped that bad title, this one's for Todd.
I'd appreciate any input on whether this works any better, and where the rough spots are.
Thanks so much for the fun of playing with this.
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