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[allykat727]

About halfway through this poem I started to discern a very legitimate style and approach; at first it feels like rhyme for the sake of rhyme, but then a pattern emerges: short clauses listing things (shower, water, soap, brush) to create a fast, frenzied, unsettling rhythm. This reflects the panic a serious, life-threatening diagnosis causes in a person, as well as the disjointed, nightmarish experience of treatment.
While I think that the poem could do with a few more unique images and sense of place and character, it does something very effective in a compelling way. Thank you for the read

Hey Heslopian,
Thanks a lot for the critique. Somehow, this post got by me unnoticed until now. I can definitely see how the rhyming feels forced in the beginning. Thanks very much for your comments! I am still editing this particular piece.. it has proven to be particularly feisty one to get quite right.