Whiskey Epiphany (revised)

[tigrflye]

Whiskey Epiphany (3rd revision)

Like cactus for the shaman,
I have found a way to rattle my soul.

And although I feel like a tree
that has been hollowed out into a canoe
I have acquired screaming spirit wisdom
from the excavated pulp of my endeavor.

Naked on the bathroom floor,
covered in my own fluids, I uncovered (coated/plastered)? in my own fluids, I uncovered
a man afraid to die

Thank you Todd and Stephanie for your posts.
Chazz

I only suggest that because I'm not the biggest fan of using the same word in a line.. or a poem unless it's needed. JMHO
I love the tidy transformation your poem has made.. My favorite part is "screaming spirit wisdom" - love it!
Also, the first word of every line does not need to be capitalized.
I very much enjoyed this. Thanks for the gem.
Jenn