11-24-2013, 04:29 AM
Hi Chazz,
I have to say is the first versions of this one didn't do anything for me. They felt a bit trite, and I couldn't connect with the poem or the characters at all.
But this last one-- it really made me FEEL something, and it was powerful. True has pointed out some details that could smooth it out, yes, but overall I'm just really impressed at the improvement. You've really made something special now. I'm glad you were brave enough to do such a drastic rewrite, because that isn't easy. Well done.
-justcloudy
I have to say is the first versions of this one didn't do anything for me. They felt a bit trite, and I couldn't connect with the poem or the characters at all.
But this last one-- it really made me FEEL something, and it was powerful. True has pointed out some details that could smooth it out, yes, but overall I'm just really impressed at the improvement. You've really made something special now. I'm glad you were brave enough to do such a drastic rewrite, because that isn't easy. Well done.
-justcloudy
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.