12-04-2013, 01:46 AM
I don't even know how to pronounce "heav'nly". I'd probably just use "heavenly", especially since you're not trying to fit it into a meter.
The last line is odd. I simply don't get what you're trying to say.
I really liked "God's death rattle--"
Over all, it was a very interesting read. Thanks!
The last line is odd. I simply don't get what you're trying to say.
I really liked "God's death rattle--"
Over all, it was a very interesting read. Thanks!
My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings:
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!