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Living in Time
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12-16-2013, 12:51 PM
A nice, if cynical, sentiment. Very enjoyable simile in S2. "He tells her loving her" threw me at first, and it distracted from the reading. "He tells her that loving her" is more readily understandable.
One question: what do you have against periods?  All in all, quite a nice piece. I enjoyed it. |
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Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-16-2013, 10:18 AM
RE: Living in Time - by HalfOpenArms - 12-16-2013, 12:51 PM
RE: Living in Time - by Blake - 01-14-2014, 07:44 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-16-2013, 11:26 PM
RE: Living in Time - by Nihil Loc - 12-17-2013, 06:25 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-17-2013, 10:19 AM
RE: Living in Time - by bena - 12-17-2013, 11:05 PM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-17-2013, 11:35 PM
RE: Living in Time - by bena - 12-18-2013, 11:25 PM
RE: Living in Time - by cheyrn - 01-06-2014, 08:12 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-07-2014, 12:39 AM
RE: Living in Time - by billy - 01-10-2014, 08:50 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-10-2014, 09:57 AM
RE: Living in Time - by ThePinsir - 01-17-2014, 01:28 AM
RE: Living in Time - by Blake - 01-17-2014, 02:25 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-24-2014, 08:50 AM
RE: Living in Time - by clemonz - 01-24-2014, 09:00 AM
RE: Living in Time - by EdwardStone - 01-26-2014, 04:01 AM
RE: Living in Time - by mahlbeck - 01-26-2014, 01:09 PM
RE: Living in Time - by Zainabk - 01-27-2014, 04:10 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-27-2014, 07:40 AM
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