A Sonnet for a Traveler

[bluedragonfly]

Hi alatos,

I like the way you described everything as I instantly visualized the whole story in my mind. Although I had a little problem with the fluency since I feel that there are some abrupt transitions in the text, especially in the end.

I really enjoyed reading the first part (until Black Sea) as it establishes a strong connection to the reader.

For me it was a little bit difficult to get what you want to say with the following passage:
Adrift to change your stars, you don’t agree
with hopeless fate.

Thanks for sharing it, I really enjoyed reading!