01-14-2014, 02:20 AM
(01-05-2014, 01:03 AM)alatos Wrote: The air of northern steppes now fills your lungs.This pair of lines I felt flowed pretty well for me. But as mentioned before the metre almost seems every so slightly off, although syllabically the lines match each other. I prefer to write syllabic verse and this is a common problem for me as well.
A stranger amidst foreign lands and tongues:

