A Sonnet for a Traveler

[Blake]

"Amid" vs "amidst" would fix it/help, no?

For me I feel that the rhythm gets off at this part:

"foreign lands and tongues"

Possibly to do with the pattern of syllables per word, and their position relative to the accompanying line?

Line 1: 9 words, 10 syllables, only one two-syllable word
Line 2: 7 words, 10 syllables, 3 two-syllable words

I am thinking if we could rearrange that second line and consult a thesaurus to try to balance the size of each word we could probably make it a tad more fluid.

For example:

The air of northern steppes now fills your lungs.
A guest of distant lands; of strange new tongues