Living in Time

Living in Time

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#14

01-17-2014, 01:28 AM

I think it should end with a period. Besides that, I might try reducing the third stanza to 3 lines just to fit the format of the rest of the poem.

I really liked your message.

Thanks for the read!

My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings:
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!

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Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-16-2013, 10:18 AM

RE: Living in Time - by HalfOpenArms - 12-16-2013, 12:51 PM

RE: Living in Time - by Blake - 01-14-2014, 07:44 AM

RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-16-2013, 11:26 PM

RE: Living in Time - by Nihil Loc - 12-17-2013, 06:25 AM

RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-17-2013, 10:19 AM

RE: Living in Time - by bena - 12-17-2013, 11:05 PM

RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-17-2013, 11:35 PM

RE: Living in Time - by bena - 12-18-2013, 11:25 PM

RE: Living in Time - by cheyrn - 01-06-2014, 08:12 AM

RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-07-2014, 12:39 AM

RE: Living in Time - by billy - 01-10-2014, 08:50 AM

RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-10-2014, 09:57 AM

RE: Living in Time - by ThePinsir - 01-17-2014, 01:28 AM

RE: Living in Time - by Blake - 01-17-2014, 02:25 AM

RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-24-2014, 08:50 AM

RE: Living in Time - by clemonz - 01-24-2014, 09:00 AM

RE: Living in Time - by EdwardStone - 01-26-2014, 04:01 AM

RE: Living in Time - by mahlbeck - 01-26-2014, 01:09 PM

RE: Living in Time - by Zainabk - 01-27-2014, 04:10 AM

RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-27-2014, 07:40 AM

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