Living in Time
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(12-16-2013, 10:18 AM)71degrees Wrote:  As she brushes her hair,
she asks him to tell her
a story with a happy ending

He tells her loving her
should be as simple
as putting a raspberry
into his mouth

They both smile; in reality,
neither understands what either
is all about

Instead, he pours them each another
glass of white wine; they put them
to their lips and drink
Thanks for ALL the different comments, etc. here. A version of this poem (under a different title) was accepted so I'm going to stick w/what was taken. Most poems I post here are rejected at least once. If (think confidently...when) they are taken, that's enough. Again, thanks.
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Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-16-2013, 10:18 AM
RE: Living in Time - by HalfOpenArms - 12-16-2013, 12:51 PM
RE: Living in Time - by Blake - 01-14-2014, 07:44 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-16-2013, 11:26 PM
RE: Living in Time - by Nihil Loc - 12-17-2013, 06:25 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-17-2013, 10:19 AM
RE: Living in Time - by bena - 12-17-2013, 11:05 PM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 12-17-2013, 11:35 PM
RE: Living in Time - by bena - 12-18-2013, 11:25 PM
RE: Living in Time - by cheyrn - 01-06-2014, 08:12 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-07-2014, 12:39 AM
RE: Living in Time - by billy - 01-10-2014, 08:50 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-10-2014, 09:57 AM
RE: Living in Time - by ThePinsir - 01-17-2014, 01:28 AM
RE: Living in Time - by Blake - 01-17-2014, 02:25 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-24-2014, 08:50 AM
RE: Living in Time - by clemonz - 01-24-2014, 09:00 AM
RE: Living in Time - by EdwardStone - 01-26-2014, 04:01 AM
RE: Living in Time - by mahlbeck - 01-26-2014, 01:09 PM
RE: Living in Time - by Zainabk - 01-27-2014, 04:10 AM
RE: Living in Time - by 71degrees - 01-27-2014, 07:40 AM



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