Women's Ward

[justcloudy]

I completely agree with JM. I really love what you're doing here, but it's too wordy for me. I'm not experienced enough to give you suggestions at what to take out specifically, but her tip about adjectives is right on the dot I think. It's a bit windy right now, which makes it less effective than it could be. Trimmed down it'll be immensely powerful.

-justcloudy