Fruit

[Humbert]

Your first two sentences have a bit of ambiguity you may not want them to have.

Otherwise, an interesting look at commerce.

Dalw

What is ambiguous about them? I mean no rudeness or sense of defense, I just am not sure what you mean

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I think both stanzas are important not only due to the irony of commerce, but differences in status or stations in life. It's perfect as is imho.

But then, I love minimalism that can say so much in so little words.

Cheers,
mel./bena

Thank you. I also felt that the second stanza was necessary for my own reasons, and was only hoping maybe to refine the poem rather than omit half of it. With little words it seems hard to change much to create the effect I wanted. Thanks for the positive feedback though; I feel encouraged