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Ode to Caffeine

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02-11-2014, 07:33 AM

(02-11-2014, 05:33 AM)shenaz Wrote: O caffeine, O caffeine
Fueling my fantasies
Faithful by morn, faithful by noon
What would I do without you?

O caffeine, O caffeine
Curbing my dreams
Make me jump, make me shake
What wouldn't I do without you.

O caffeine, O caffeine
Coloring my view
Swear by you, swot by you
What would I do without you?

you already have perfect meter with the refrains. try and get a perfect meter in the two filler lines of each stanza.

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Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 02-11-2014, 05:33 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Erthona - 02-11-2014, 05:50 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by billy - 02-11-2014, 07:33 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 02-12-2014, 02:57 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Æther - 02-14-2014, 02:44 PM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 02-15-2014, 09:43 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by kindofahippy - 02-18-2014, 02:49 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by tectak - 04-10-2014, 04:08 PM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by ChristopherSea - 04-10-2014, 07:39 PM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by micpschm - 04-10-2014, 11:05 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Leanne - 04-10-2014, 07:45 PM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by ChristopherSea - 04-10-2014, 07:51 PM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Chaosrxn - 04-12-2014, 09:20 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Simba - 04-14-2014, 09:05 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Am I A Poet? - 04-18-2014, 05:11 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 04-25-2014, 06:20 PM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Robert9614 - 04-22-2014, 08:48 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Nbafan - 04-23-2014, 03:55 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by paxsan - 04-25-2014, 05:55 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Bunx - 04-26-2014, 04:10 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by aerickson - 04-26-2014, 05:49 AM

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