03-04-2014, 02:22 AM
hello,
i was actually a little disturbed by this poem, which is always nice. I think the tenses in the first two lines are unclear, not necessarily wrong, just poorly worded, which makes figuring it all out a bit of a pain.
also, i did think of cocaine, too, and tried to find the link, and it all looks really cool as a drug poem, though i am not sure that that was your intentio; but layers are good, even unintentional ones.
thanks for the read. short and sweet... unlike my lines of cocaine
i was actually a little disturbed by this poem, which is always nice. I think the tenses in the first two lines are unclear, not necessarily wrong, just poorly worded, which makes figuring it all out a bit of a pain.
also, i did think of cocaine, too, and tried to find the link, and it all looks really cool as a drug poem, though i am not sure that that was your intentio; but layers are good, even unintentional ones.
thanks for the read. short and sweet... unlike my lines of cocaine