it's quite likable, i think the meter needs a little work, if you can make it constant it will improve the read no end,
(03-18-2014, 09:20 AM)Carousal Wrote:Play it again Sam
The Bowl, the Garden, I've played them all
Las Vegas in the September Fall
Caesars, Stardust, and the Sands
Obliging girls the one night stands
My face on all the magazines
Penthouse keys, stretch limousines
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Still singing through my autumn years
Though the young don’t want to hear
My greying hair is touched with blue
I sing the old songs, nothing new
Though the voice is clear,
the pitch still perfect
I’m booked to sing the granny circuit these three lines could use better meter.
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But I’ll never quit the spotlight glare is but needed?
Push me on in my old wheel chair
I’ll sing for a dollar or one thin dime
Strike up the band, just one more time
This aging idol doesn't give a damn
So give me the intro, play it Sam is so needed