Ode to Caffeine

Ode to Caffeine

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04-10-2014, 04:08 PM

(02-18-2014, 02:49 AM)kindofahippy Wrote: O caffeine, O caffeine
Fueling my fantasies
Faithful by morn, faithful by noon
What would I do without you?

I'm probably wrong about this, but what if you changed the first line to Fueling all my fantasies? It would give this stanza an even seven syllables throughout and improve flow.

Fu/ell/ing?
tec/tak

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Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 02-11-2014, 05:33 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Erthona - 02-11-2014, 05:50 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by billy - 02-11-2014, 07:33 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 02-12-2014, 02:57 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Æther - 02-14-2014, 02:44 PM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 02-15-2014, 09:43 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by kindofahippy - 02-18-2014, 02:49 AM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by tectak - 04-10-2014, 04:08 PM

RE: Ode to Caffeine - by ChristopherSea - 04-10-2014, 07:39 PM