Ode to Caffeine
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(04-10-2014, 04:08 PM)tectak Wrote:  
(02-18-2014, 02:49 AM)kindofahippy Wrote:  O caffeine, O caffeine
Fueling my fantasies
Faithful by morn, faithful by noon
What would I do without you?


I'm probably wrong about this, but what if you changed the first line to Fueling all my fantasies? It would give this stanza an even seven syllables throughout and improve flow.
Fu/ell/ing?
tec/tak
Tom, Is that really fyu-el-ing or fyul-ing. milo would probably argue with you on the dictionary denotation verses colloquial vocalization./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris
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Messages In This Thread
Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 02-11-2014, 05:33 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Erthona - 02-11-2014, 05:50 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by billy - 02-11-2014, 07:33 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 02-12-2014, 02:57 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Æther - 02-14-2014, 02:44 PM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 02-15-2014, 09:43 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by kindofahippy - 02-18-2014, 02:49 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by tectak - 04-10-2014, 04:08 PM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by ChristopherSea - 04-10-2014, 07:39 PM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by micpschm - 04-10-2014, 11:05 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Leanne - 04-10-2014, 07:45 PM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by ChristopherSea - 04-10-2014, 07:51 PM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Chaosrxn - 04-12-2014, 09:20 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Simba - 04-14-2014, 09:05 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Am I A Poet? - 04-18-2014, 05:11 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by shenaz - 04-25-2014, 06:20 PM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Robert9614 - 04-22-2014, 08:48 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Nbafan - 04-23-2014, 03:55 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by paxsan - 04-25-2014, 05:55 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by Bunx - 04-26-2014, 04:10 AM
RE: Ode to Caffeine - by aerickson - 04-26-2014, 05:49 AM



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