First limerick attempt

[Brownlie]

Aye but once a drunkard possessin' great odor
Would find some raunchy lass with little candor.
By night he'd stagger home to the woods
Invite gals to his cabin for steak, beer, and “goods”
No surprise, then, once woke he with a real cur.

Edit one

Once a drunkard possessin' great odor -- You start with a trochee here and need an anapest after your first foot. There is also one extra foot I think a limerick traditionally starts with eight syllables
Would find some raunchy lass of no candor. -- Again, I think to have a limerick here you would need the second foot to be an anapest. The anapests are essential to the limerick in my opinion.
They'd stagger home to the woods - A traditional limerick would have five syllables here.
At night for a beer - This would be what I think a five syllabic line in the middle of a traditional limerick would look like. The anapests in a limerick really create a staggering effect in my opinion.

surprise, then, to wake to a cur. This would be what one of the bordering lines may look like metrically in a limerick, though the syntax in my reordering is quite awkward. I'm even a little iffy on the quality of the word then there as an unstressed component of the foot.

1) - / - - / - - / 2) - / - - / - - / 3) - / - - / 4) - / - - / 5) - / - - / - - / - See more at: http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMI...zlbfN.dpuf
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Once a drunkard possessin' great odor
Would find some raunchy lass of no candor.
They'd stagger home to the woods
At night for beer, steak and “goods”
No surprise, then, once woke he with a real cur.

Kindo, tectak's example does have the 9-9-6-6-9 meter that is preferred. This would sound better thusly;

A drunkard possessin' great odor
found some raunchy lass with no candor
staggered home through the woods
for a beer, steak and “goods”
No surprise to find her a realtor

This actually sounds pretty good I never really played with different formations of the Limerick.