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Diesel
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05-05-2014, 01:30 PM
I liked this, but I felt that the second stanza was unnecessary. However, since you have "William to Bailey" in the first stanza, perhaps you could have incorporated one line from the second stanza into each of the other stanzas, instead of having the second stanza as itself. That would give the piece more shape.
Nice write!
Let's put Rowdy on top of the TV and see which one of us can throw a hat on him first.
 
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Diesel - by bbcashdollar - 05-05-2014, 11:01 AM
RE: Diesel - by Markworth - 05-05-2014, 11:08 AM
RE: Diesel - by bbcashdollar - 05-05-2014, 11:14 AM
RE: Diesel - by newsclippings - 05-05-2014, 11:23 AM
RE: Diesel - by poe - 05-07-2014, 05:11 AM
RE: Diesel - by bbcashdollar - 05-07-2014, 05:17 AM
RE: Diesel - by RSaba - 05-05-2014, 01:30 PM
RE: Diesel - by bbcashdollar - 05-05-2014, 08:27 PM
RE: Diesel - by ChristopherSea - 05-06-2014, 04:21 AM
RE: Diesel - by bbcashdollar - 05-06-2014, 05:09 AM
RE: Diesel - by ChristopherSea - 05-05-2014, 06:54 PM
RE: Diesel - by Erthona - 05-06-2014, 08:10 AM
RE: Diesel - by bbcashdollar - 05-06-2014, 08:46 AM
RE: Diesel - by RSaba - 05-07-2014, 03:57 AM
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