Do You Fear the Passage of Time

[ChristopherSea]

Will, there's a good deal of superfluous wording and repetition herein. Smoke, sooty, hazy, cloudy are synonymous in the context of your poem and some used multiple times. The same goes for candles and flames. This poem should be condensed into a stanza of 8 lines or less. Strive for brevity, as regurgitation of the same point weakens a poem. Good luck with your next edit./Chris