05-14-2014, 08:35 AM
Hi,
I really like the theme, and your insights.
I agree you should work on the imagery, lots of smoke and haze. So you could really shorten the poem or find different associations.
You could really do without the questions, and it wouldn't change much.
Alex
I really like the theme, and your insights.
I agree you should work on the imagery, lots of smoke and haze. So you could really shorten the poem or find different associations.
You could really do without the questions, and it wouldn't change much.
Alex