06-02-2014, 03:00 PM 
	
	
	(06-02-2014, 02:23 PM)vtsai01 Wrote: You don't know it but you do it.Read it through and correct all spelling mistakes (inherit menance?), check the authenticity of word meaning (resilience mimics?). Try to limit abstractions to one per line...avoid repetition of "it". Punctuate correctly.Then use the "list" of phrases which you have made to introduce cameos of imagery, metaphor and frankly, interesting phrasing, to give the piece texture and depth.
You empower yourself with its consumption.
Haziness is often misinterpreted as happiness.
The perceptions at moment become deceptions,
Using your perseverance to find some sort of reverence.
You try to fool but your resilience mimics the silence.
The substances you use are to hide its inherit menance.
Oh it's so lovely. You can't stop to stare.
You depreciate your senses just to appreciate.
Crafting that moment as if it's your own installment.
You make yourself want to; to want to die.
Just so that you can love life.
Put some effort into this one.
Best,
tectak

 

 
