Solitary

[LorettaYoung]

Hi Loretta, I have read this many times and like it very much. It's about all of us here, after all. Took me a few days to even muster a crit as I thought most of the other comments were very good. I agree about the title. I wonder if the problem in the title extends into the first stanza...
Ah, I am lost to solitary confines.
My body is at rest, but my mind defined;
by imagination, unbridled and unconfined.

I'm pretty sure the "meaning" in L1 is a joyous time for the speaker. But lost/solitary/confines seem to all carry negative connotations that create a "mood" bigger than the meaning. ( maybe not so much with "lost")
I think you might be asking too much of the word confine. You are asking it to be a comfort in line 1 then demonize it in L3. I see what you were going for, but some readers might not be sure whether or not they want to be confined. I hope that made sense.
I enjoyed this every time I read it. Thanks for sharing, Paul

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Hi Tiger: I would hope that the reader who gather that this confine was a happy choice; a choice to be freed from life to imagination. If I did not show this then I need to find a better way somewhere. I agree that the title and first line are off and am thinking of what to do. But thanks for your time and comments. Loretta

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Hi LorettaYoung!

On the whole, lovely.

But why is the one who follows you a "poor fool'? Perhaps he or she might be inspired by your example?

nb

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Hi nb: thanks for reading and commenting. There are endless paths to choose from; even in a momentary time. There is purposeful irony to the statement of a poor fool following that chance path. I will say philosophically that beauty is on the other side of the coin of pain. Loretta