06-18-2014, 07:03 AM
(06-18-2014, 06:34 AM)trueenigma Wrote: my Grand ma used to say back in the 1800's, "he's a poet and he doesn't know it; his feet show it - they're long fellows. her great great grandchildren still say it today *rolls eyes*
Thanks for reading and commenting; oh my gosh, but it's not really a common phrase: what I am saying here is that he is too busy trying to be liked to be interested in being a poet. It was his life as an actor which made
his ordinary speech so literary; and he used that appeal for his purposes; popularity. Thanks for reading and commenting. Best, Loretta
(06-18-2014, 05:48 AM)tectak Wrote:(06-18-2014, 03:44 AM)LorettaYoung Wrote:"l shall be free(06-18-2014, 03:15 AM)tectak Wrote: Well, unless this piece is about Dylan Dementia I have no idea of the point but I think it may be about me. Or Dale. Or Milo.Or Billy. Or..or....
Best,
tectak( I can spell what)
Hi Tectak: I answered you line by line after your critiques in regular type so you can see it; I might add, laughing, all the while. Thanks so much; so much good advice; are my explanations understandable. Now, I must know about rims? Best, Loretta
(06-18-2014, 02:54 AM)Brownlie Wrote: Ok I like you and left you some notes. I'd like to see something a little more real from you, but people do like different things.
Hi Brownlie: Thanks for reading and commenting; and time. I never, ever heard the word "he's a poet but don't know it" before. Stature win; I agree; somewhat awkard, I will think it out and try to make it better. I felt like that line about the stage would give away that he is an actor. Debonair is a word I worked for; a contrast to his age and reflecting his desire for status. Thanks again, Best Loretta
(06-18-2014, 02:54 AM)Brownlie Wrote: Ok I like you and left you some notes. I'd like to see something a little more real from you, but people do like different things.
PS Brownlie: I didn't understand what you meant about he AA Rhyme. I thought The Picture of His Face was fairly real?
no.10" by Bob Dylan. Plagiarist with plausible denial
Best,
tectak
tectak: really? Dylan? Does this mean the firing squad; and it can never be said again; EVER. OK, you're saying new title; is the poem worth it? Thank, Best Loretta


