06-21-2014, 07:20 AM
If I may interject I would like to mention that if the author wants the trope, if in fact it is a trope, to carry the full weight of the allusion to thereader then a rock rolled up the hill would be better, or any scene that clearly depicts a laborious yet futile endeavor.
As it is I think there is already a ghost of metaphorical allusion there that doesn't really send the reader off to go look it up because in this case it obviously doesn't fit the whole story since in this case it is pretty clear that the futility is self induced.
It seems to work quiet well.
The author may not have even alluded conciously and the symbol may have simply worked is way in through an inexplicable understanding of effective communication. Balls carry thier own (psychoanalytic) symbols as well and the narrator seems to comes off without any authorial self-consciousness in regards to either.
bang up job on s1 if you ask me.
In s2 he should maybe reconsider "before the bar", possibly "watched his vision blur" but in this case the ball, the trope, the N, the character and the reader are all inside his mind so it's a pretty interesting take!
As it is I think there is already a ghost of metaphorical allusion there that doesn't really send the reader off to go look it up because in this case it obviously doesn't fit the whole story since in this case it is pretty clear that the futility is self induced.
It seems to work quiet well.
The author may not have even alluded conciously and the symbol may have simply worked is way in through an inexplicable understanding of effective communication. Balls carry thier own (psychoanalytic) symbols as well and the narrator seems to comes off without any authorial self-consciousness in regards to either.
bang up job on s1 if you ask me.
In s2 he should maybe reconsider "before the bar", possibly "watched his vision blur" but in this case the ball, the trope, the N, the character and the reader are all inside his mind so it's a pretty interesting take!