Hearts of The Unbroken

[KatBrown]

First, let me say that there are parts of this poem where I really feel the sentiment you are expressing. My favorite being the passage which says,

Breaches in trust
Love sunk emotions
For ours was no lust
But fathoms measured by oceans

And then the section on (reflections of our past)...to me these are the heart of this poem and the rest just seems like more. Maybe you could focus on the ideas expressed in these passages and develop them and remember that sometimes less is more. The rest, for me, just muddies the concept.

I know it takes a lot of courage to put yourself out there so good on you and keep going!