Hearts of The Unbroken

Hearts of The Unbroken

Brian

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#17

07-19-2014, 03:53 PM

My 1st critique, so bear with me please.

I can feel the emotion which has driven you to write these feelings and thoughts, Sometimes it takes a lot of words to fully express oneself. Not wanting to sound like the others, but i had problems with the fathom/ocean reversal and the thy/thee structure also.

Whatever you do, dont stop writing.

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Hearts of The Unbroken - by WordJunky - 03-18-2014, 11:21 AM

RE: Hearts of The Unbroken - by rowens - 03-19-2014, 06:35 AM

RE: Hearts of The Unbroken - by WordJunky - 03-20-2014, 06:47 PM

RE: Hearts of The Unbroken - by ChristopherSea - 03-20-2014, 08:14 PM

RE: Hearts of The Unbroken - by WordJunky - 03-20-2014, 10:18 PM

RE: Hearts of The Unbroken - by ChristopherSea - 03-25-2014, 09:11 PM

RE: Hearts of The Unbroken - by L Oquence - 03-21-2014, 09:37 AM

RE: Hearts of The Unbroken - by WordJunky - 03-21-2014, 11:14 AM

RE: Hearts of The Unbroken - by incognito - 03-29-2014, 10:26 PM

RE: Hearts of The Unbroken - by Erthona - 03-31-2014, 10:19 AM