08-01-2014, 07:07 PM
(07-30-2014, 11:47 PM)billy Wrote: feedback requires actual feedback to count as feedback, your post has been deleted. /admin
(07-30-2014, 11:40 PM)Spuddo45 Wrote:(06-02-2014, 02:23 PM)vtsai01 Wrote: You don't know it but you do it. You empower yourself with its consumption.
Haziness is often misinterpreted as happiness. The perceptions at moment become deceptions, using your perseverance to find some sort of reverence. You try to fool but your resilience mimics the silence. The substances you use are to hide its inherit menace.
Oh it's so lovely. You can't stop to stare. You depreciate your senses just to appreciate. Crafting that moment as if it's your own installment. You make yourself want to; to want to die. Just so that you can love life.
The poem is a thought provoking but as over readers have commented a little pretentious. Well Done.
(08-01-2014, 04:08 PM)Callmesean Wrote: to preachy for meWelcome. Please read the guidelines for critique pinned to the top of each forum. Thanks/mod
billy wrote:welcome to the site. make it your own, wear it like a well loved slipper and wear it out. ella pleads:please click forum titles for posting guidelines, important threads. New poet? Try Poetic DevicesandWard's Tips