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A stranger less fortunate (edited)
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08-06-2014, 02:34 PM
More revision. I THINK it can handle some fresh criticism once again considering it's changed significantly. Thanks for the wonderful feedback tectak! The poem is certainly sucks much less than the heap of words it spawned from and I can see why and how. I'll definitely remember these lessons in future poems.
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A stranger less fortunate (edited) - by SomeRandom - 08-04-2014, 11:09 PM
RE: A stranger less fortunate - by milo - 08-04-2014, 11:38 PM
RE: A stranger less fortunate - by ChristopherSea - 08-04-2014, 11:48 PM
RE: A stranger less fortunate - by tectak - 08-05-2014, 12:42 AM
RE: A stranger less fortunate - by SomeRandom - 08-05-2014, 04:10 AM
RE: A stranger less fortunate - by Leanne - 08-05-2014, 04:27 AM
RE: A stranger less fortunate (edited) - by tectak - 08-05-2014, 07:20 AM
RE: A stranger less fortunate (edited) - by SomeRandom - 08-05-2014, 07:42 AM
RE: A stranger less fortunate (edited) - by tectak - 08-05-2014, 08:39 AM
RE: A stranger less fortunate (edited) - by SomeRandom - 08-06-2014, 02:34 PM
RE: A stranger less fortunate (edited) - by tectak - 08-06-2014, 04:50 PM
RE: A stranger less fortunate (edited) - by billy - 08-06-2014, 05:30 PM
RE: A stranger less fortunate (edited) - by SomeRandom - 08-07-2014, 01:51 AM
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