09-01-2014, 09:04 PM
thank you much for taking the time. 
it's a poem i probably didn't give enough attention before slapping it up here (wrote it same day). all the same, i always get more from the critique than i think i will.
about punctuation. i just don't like lots of periods sometimes, so i just start capital on what would normally be a new sentence. (even then i think i messed that up in S1) anyone else who cares to crit, if you would let me know what you think about the need for periods. some people don't use them but maybe in the style i'm writing they would be better.
besides that this poem probably could be clearer in meaning and use more poetic devices. (now i am critiquing my own work
)
it's a poem i probably didn't give enough attention before slapping it up here (wrote it same day). all the same, i always get more from the critique than i think i will. about punctuation. i just don't like lots of periods sometimes, so i just start capital on what would normally be a new sentence. (even then i think i messed that up in S1) anyone else who cares to crit, if you would let me know what you think about the need for periods. some people don't use them but maybe in the style i'm writing they would be better.
besides that this poem probably could be clearer in meaning and use more poetic devices. (now i am critiquing my own work
)
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