Fat

[zahrakh]

Personally I liked this piece. It is a nice cathartic poem. At the start, They’ve called me Fat
Simply because I eat
She eats much and this is the reason she is obese, so they call her fat just because she eats doesn't sound right.
And there are some awkward line breaks, like
Hollowness that devours all things inside of me, I
Eat to escape the horrible darkness that rises up
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here breaking line at "I" feels wrong, it could be

Hollowness that devours all things inside of me,
I eat to escape the horrible darkness that rises up
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Tell your friend she should keep writing because she is talented.