09-25-2014, 10:59 AM
Danny,
Just a quick note. It's great to mine old works for potential, and this one deserves to be unmothballed. Let's look at the elements you have:
A droplet and light passing through it.
--if I remember, a droplet gives a "fisheye" lens
--it turns the image upside down and backward
--if struck by a coherent beam of light, it will act as a prism
--it has a symbolic nature: raindrops are round; also , the participate in a well-delineated cycle
Wire
--if I remember, wire comes from the etym of iridescent and iris
--wires carry either (1) charge or (2) signal. Here, it's likely charge
--water on a wire is at least a little scary
The couple
--they are ignorant of the city, the city is blind to their dreams
--there's a sense that they might be endangered
--if "the couple" is one person in reflection, then the symbols at least go together . . .
Nice read!
crow
Just a quick note. It's great to mine old works for potential, and this one deserves to be unmothballed. Let's look at the elements you have:
A droplet and light passing through it.
--if I remember, a droplet gives a "fisheye" lens
--it turns the image upside down and backward
--if struck by a coherent beam of light, it will act as a prism
--it has a symbolic nature: raindrops are round; also , the participate in a well-delineated cycle
Wire
--if I remember, wire comes from the etym of iridescent and iris
--wires carry either (1) charge or (2) signal. Here, it's likely charge
--water on a wire is at least a little scary
The couple
--they are ignorant of the city, the city is blind to their dreams
--there's a sense that they might be endangered
--if "the couple" is one person in reflection, then the symbols at least go together . . .
Nice read!
crow
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