A Storm is COming

A Storm is COming

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09-26-2014, 12:23 PM

This is great - very dark though. I would like to see you balance it and brighten it up at the end with some more inspiring ending. I see that you punched a tag line at the end but it would be better to weave some brightness throughout the poem.

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A Storm is COming - by 2fargone - 09-25-2014, 09:41 PM

RE: A Storm is COming - by billy - 09-25-2014, 10:47 PM

RE: A Storm is COming - by Todd - 09-26-2014, 12:24 AM

RE: A Storm is COming - by StanleyZ - 09-26-2014, 10:08 AM

RE: A Storm is COming - by simmon - 09-26-2014, 12:21 PM

RE: A Storm is COming - by Starbeam - 09-26-2014, 12:23 PM

RE: A Storm is COming - by 2fargone - 09-28-2014, 12:29 AM

RE: A Storm is COming - by oceanwanderer20 - 10-10-2014, 06:01 AM

RE: A Storm is COming - by Hermit - 10-23-2014, 09:06 AM

RE: A Storm is COming - by lateralus - 10-25-2014, 06:48 AM

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