lanterne poem

[cjchaffin]

hey dale,

thanks for chiming in. you're right about the third strophe, it's weak. i need to punch it up a bit.

i guess i should clarify what "them" is in the second strophe as well.

i wonder if it would read better connected in a chain instead of broken? hmm. i dunno. at any rate, i'll try to make it stronger.

thank you!