10-26-2014, 02:51 AM
First I would suggest just a slightly larger font. I had a hard time understanding the poem on the first read. However on subsequent reads I enjoyed it. It is interesting how you are romanticizing these memories.
Compensations
I think it's nice how the wind is blowing,
like something out of a movie,
almost like something out of a book.
Something old
and real—from being real a long time,
like grandparents' ghosts and ouija boards before Parker Brothers bought it.
The wind at night, especially on an especially dark night, I don't like the repetition of the word especially maybe dank?
is like dead people alive:
I don't know why that is;
if I had to think about it
it probably wouldn't feel that way anymore.
But, then again, if I think about it I might feel it even more.
I was only thirteen years old the first time I saw someone die,
and I don't remember anything about the weather or anything. I would remove "or anything" it seem unnecessary
But I saw a movie where the wind blew,
and the dead returned at night.
And even though it was a horror movie,
I felt more reassured than scared.
Compensations
I think it's nice how the wind is blowing,
like something out of a movie,
almost like something out of a book.
Something old
and real—from being real a long time,
like grandparents' ghosts and ouija boards before Parker Brothers bought it.
The wind at night, especially on an especially dark night, I don't like the repetition of the word especially maybe dank?
is like dead people alive:
I don't know why that is;
if I had to think about it
it probably wouldn't feel that way anymore.
But, then again, if I think about it I might feel it even more.
I was only thirteen years old the first time I saw someone die,
and I don't remember anything about the weather or anything. I would remove "or anything" it seem unnecessary
But I saw a movie where the wind blew,
and the dead returned at night.
And even though it was a horror movie,
I felt more reassured than scared.
"I asked him for mercy, he gave me a gun"

