Jack in a box

[Keith]

I really like this one, here are some notes.

The sherry glass squeaked
inside the tea towel Immediately puts me there, great start.
as Jack finished off
the last of his supper dishes.

He switched off the kitchen light,
settled down for the nightly news.
His fingers waggled for attention,
roughly licked by a friendly tongue.
Maybe remembered the lick because why didn't the dog wake him up?

Eyes closed behind strong readers
as the completed crossword
slid over his belly onto the floor.
Unaware of the pair arguing outside.
Strong readers is great, it's the first time I get his age.

You do it.
Get stuffed it was your idea.
Do it you wimp.
No, it was your idea you do it.
Ha, I always knew you had no balls,
wait till I tell the rest of the lads.
Ok! Give it here then,
but you’re doing the next one.
Love this, is rings true and shows it wasn't even personal.

The boy scurried to Jack’s door
and rattled the brass knocker,
lit the Banger, shouted wanker
and dropped it through the letterbox.
On top of the mail
Jack was too frail to pick up.
He wasn't too frail to make dinner and wash up, maybe just absent-minded.

The TV was louder than a Western Something sounds off here, maybe as loud as.
and Jack could sleep through gun shots,
never heard the knock or the call,
didn't smell the smoke as it blinded the hall.

Well done, thanks for posting it, I enjoyed the read.

Thanks Ella for the considered feedback and good catch on the 'too frail' I will change it, I also need to look at the dog because its a cat, all other comments are very helpful for the edit, cheers Keith