gravity

[azure]

 
what´s heavy was light Don't like 'was' maybe replace with is?
and the other way round
what is rock will to sand This line is horrid, and grammatically incorrect.
and to stardust be turned. In context of the previous lines, this doesn't make sense.
 
through time and space
we are floating apart We?
but gravity´s embrace
acts endlessly far. I don't like the rhyme here. It doesn't read smoothly.
 
so we´re again pulled together
and meld to new suns how about 'and meld into new suns'?
then one way or another
we finish to burn  eh, descent I suppose in it's drab expression
 
only to burst
by the weight of our cores
circle turning forever a bland use of rhyme.
magical force

This piece lacks descriptive continuity. The language was boring and dull. I suggest that you spend some time reading contemporary poetry. You could learn a lot, and use that knowledge to develop a unique command of language and expression. Don't give up.

Azure