cirrhosis

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Quite liked this - good/sad snapshot of the writer and some of his family.
As far as suggs:
I think you should remove the word "From" in: "from trying to become as yellow" - that way it's the cirrhosis that is trying to turn yellow - which gives it an evil personification of its own. Also seems like a lot of phrases at the end of the last sentence - to.. of.. in.. as.. I think you could end this with a short high-impact sentence to give it some finality - but may be just my personal preferences..
Good effort here! I love it when a writer does his/her work and thinks out every part.
Paul

Thank you for your suggestions and comments. I might just consider adding a 'high-impact' ending line.