Silly Song

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Hi, Voker.

For me the rhyme scheme undermined the weight of the idea, too lightweight for a Song of Desperation. If you take a look at the practice threads you'll find many interesting rhyme schemes you might be interested in attempting. Welcome.

Just a rough-draft i was really eager to post. Wrote this about 2 months ago and never really touched up on it but would like to hear your thoughts good and/or bad. Oh and I know my grammar/punctuation isn't perfect here but that's just my personal choice. I think it's eccentric but feel free to voice your opinion.

This is The Song of Desperation/
filled with rage and much frustration/
Moved by hate when love's adjacent/
dreamt of Freddy, Chuck, and Jason/

This is The Song of Shady Antics/
born a monster; the Devil's handpick/
Life of lies, it's never candid/
this is the curse that I am damned with/

This is The Song of Whips and Chains/
slave the young, slit their veins/
I hear them whisper "Vic's insane!"/
I'm mad they say, a bit deranged/

This is The Song of Sticks and Stones/
when sung aloud, will chip your bones/
No other genre grips the throne/
like the Song of Songs,it sits alone/