02-02-2015, 01:23 AM
(12-24-2014, 05:53 AM)Wjames Wrote: Lovely read. I've just a tiny problem with punctuation, though. I think the third line should be separated from the fourth by a comma, the first from the second by a colon, [maybe] the fifth from the sixth with a colon, too, and bottles shouldn't be possessive (if it's not, it is sort of weird that one bottle became a whole load of mics)
Bottle’s become microphones,
grandma thinks she’s Cher;
limbo dancing nieces flail
but grandpa’s unaware.
Napping with a drink in hand,
his snores conduct the beat;
my voice is like a crocodile’s,
so I just move my feet.