02-12-2015, 06:43 AM
I'm nitpicking now:
"Chronos
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
Not to be confused with Cronus, the Titan father of Zeus."
Later on it does say that the confusion between the two resulted in Plutarch identifying them as the same.
I like the line "the click of Cronus' heels" very much, but not so much,
"a spendthrift of minutes,
a wastrel of hours,
a squanderer of days,
as I idled in a diffidently
hesitating, halcyon haze."
I find myself falling into a word-induced carb coma.
"and put neatly in it’s place," Not it's: its!
"throughout
the universe permeates." 'Woop! woop! woop! Inversion Alert!
As far as:
"time con-tin-u-e-s
to
wind
...down."
May I suggest the following:
"time con-tin-u-e-s
--to --
wind --
-- down."
Carry on. Leah
"Chronos
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
Not to be confused with Cronus, the Titan father of Zeus."
Later on it does say that the confusion between the two resulted in Plutarch identifying them as the same.
I like the line "the click of Cronus' heels" very much, but not so much,
"a spendthrift of minutes,
a wastrel of hours,
a squanderer of days,
as I idled in a diffidently
hesitating, halcyon haze."
I find myself falling into a word-induced carb coma.
"and put neatly in it’s place," Not it's: its!
"throughout
the universe permeates." 'Woop! woop! woop! Inversion Alert!
As far as:
"time con-tin-u-e-s
to
wind
...down."
May I suggest the following:
"time con-tin-u-e-s
--to --
wind --
-- down."
Carry on. Leah