04-12-2015, 01:02 AM
"The feeling of electricity when I hold your hand,
As if lighting had struck twice where I stand,
Shoots up my arm and blows through my mind;
Like a shockwave, your touch ripples through my insides."
"The feeling of electricity when I hold your hand,
As if lighting had struck twice where I stand,
Shooting up my arm and blowing through my mind;
Like a shockwave, your touch ripples through my insides."
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"I couldn't care for what they all might say;"
"I would not care what they might say."
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"dead" does not rhyme with "Beth", "death" does.
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The lack of any consistent meter in combination with the rhyming couplets pretty much dooms this poem for anything other than private use. But as that seems to be what it is for, I guess you're in the clear.
Best,
Dale
As if lighting had struck twice where I stand,
Shoots up my arm and blows through my mind;
Like a shockwave, your touch ripples through my insides."
"The feeling of electricity when I hold your hand,
As if lighting had struck twice where I stand,
Shooting up my arm and blowing through my mind;
Like a shockwave, your touch ripples through my insides."
___________________________________________________
"I couldn't care for what they all might say;"
"I would not care what they might say."
_________________________________________________
"dead" does not rhyme with "Beth", "death" does.
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The lack of any consistent meter in combination with the rhyming couplets pretty much dooms this poem for anything other than private use. But as that seems to be what it is for, I guess you're in the clear.
Best,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.