04-24-2015, 08:48 AM
(04-24-2015, 06:48 AM)ellajam Wrote:perhaps - "a moonbeam's trail unwinds downhill(04-24-2015, 06:44 AM)milo Wrote:Thanks, unless there's a chorus of "oh, no you don't" I'll keep downhill and just see what I can do to get rid of which.(04-24-2015, 05:05 AM)ellajam Wrote:Downhill is a word that changes based on usage. As an adjective it is a trochee - she was a great downhill skier.![]()
Any opinions on whether or not downHILL is acceptable?
When I show any improvement the credit is to The Pen, thanks to all of you who take the time to push me along. I'm also a good example of how valuable it is to learn to critique other people's poems, bound to learn something in the process.
As an adverb it is an iamb - things are really going downhill.
That being said, the plasticity on the accent is high enough that it would comfortably bow to predominant meter imo.
and slips right through the wooden blind"

