Nightwalking (title change, edit #3.2 (Todd)

[milo]

 
Any opinions on whether or not downHILL is acceptable?

When I show any improvement the credit is to The Pen, thanks to all of you who take the time to push me along. I'm also a good example of how valuable it is to learn to critique other people's poems, bound to learn something in the process.

Downhill is a word that changes based on usage.  As an adjective it is a trochee - she was a great downhill skier.

As an adverb it is an iamb - things are really going downhill.

That being said, the plasticity on the accent is high enough that it would comfortably bow to predominant meter imo.

Thanks, unless there's a chorus of "oh, no you don't" I'll keep downhill and just see what I can do to get rid of which.

perhaps - "a moonbeam's trail unwinds downhill
and slips right through the wooden blind"