05-20-2015, 02:11 AM
RN,
I'm not a big fan of white space, but here I would say it merely enhances the poem and the poem is not dependent on it which is the correct usage of it.
I'm trying to read this as something more than a generalization and see it as more archetypal. However the more times I read it, I see nothing more than the first time I read it. I think whatever you intended for the piece is not manifesting, at least not for me, but then again I am an sad old man and truthfully whatever you are romanticizing I see it not in myself. So I must conclude that this is a metaphor for something else, or you don't know your subject particularly well. Sorry, I'm sure I must be missing something.
Dale
I'm not a big fan of white space, but here I would say it merely enhances the poem and the poem is not dependent on it which is the correct usage of it.
I'm trying to read this as something more than a generalization and see it as more archetypal. However the more times I read it, I see nothing more than the first time I read it. I think whatever you intended for the piece is not manifesting, at least not for me, but then again I am an sad old man and truthfully whatever you are romanticizing I see it not in myself. So I must conclude that this is a metaphor for something else, or you don't know your subject particularly well. Sorry, I'm sure I must be missing something.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.