06-06-2015, 06:24 PM
A witty and enjoyable read. The dialogue conveys a lot about the piece, and is probably the highlight of it for that reason but there should be a line break each time a new person speaks so the conversation is clearer to follow.
Oh, and I also liked how the last line loops the story right back to the start. It's like adding a bow to a gift box filled with worst-case scenarios.
Oh, and I also liked how the last line loops the story right back to the start. It's like adding a bow to a gift box filled with worst-case scenarios.