How do you paint a picture with words? Revision

[billy]

i think you're well past the emo stage. often poems about poetry fail to work, but this works well enough. a couple of lines could be clipped, or possibly split,  in general it only needs a bit of cosmetic work.

Any kind of comment welcome...

How do you paint a picture with words? i think this is a relevant cliche, and works well enough to keep.
Syllables sloping, groping emotion, forcing a rhyme...  maybe lose the last [ing]
I want to know, I want to flow
across pages into the deepest chasms of the human condition, chasms seems too poetic, be original, i'd have chosen fingerprints, you can use that or choose another word
eluding my grasp in the glossy, dark caverns of humanity. [the] and[of humanity] feels as though they aren't needed isn't needed, nice alliteration
What is poetry? A thought, an emotion? If a word is a thought no need for [what] or the first [?]
why can't it be me, expressing, attesting for you to see.
There's a rhyme, does it flow, does it go, scratching my heart, touching my soul.