08-07-2015, 09:52 AM
Hi Wjames,
Not much to offer that hasn't already been said. I must admit, like ambrosial revelation brought up, that the word snare confused me the first few times I read it, and it took me a while before I figured out it wasn't a snare for trapping animals, but rather a snare drum. But this may have more to do with me not being a native speaker of English, than it has to with the poem being in any way unclear about what's meant.
But I enjoyed your poem. I like the musical feel it has, which I think also comes through well when read out loud. Apart from the snare, I could both hear and see your poem clearly on the first reads. I think the words are well chosen, like the final word 'roll' which has that musical feel, and also takes me back to the image of the rocking chair. The poem altogether ties in with itself very well.
Thanks for an enjoyable read
- Volaticus
Not much to offer that hasn't already been said. I must admit, like ambrosial revelation brought up, that the word snare confused me the first few times I read it, and it took me a while before I figured out it wasn't a snare for trapping animals, but rather a snare drum. But this may have more to do with me not being a native speaker of English, than it has to with the poem being in any way unclear about what's meant.
But I enjoyed your poem. I like the musical feel it has, which I think also comes through well when read out loud. Apart from the snare, I could both hear and see your poem clearly on the first reads. I think the words are well chosen, like the final word 'roll' which has that musical feel, and also takes me back to the image of the rocking chair. The poem altogether ties in with itself very well.
Thanks for an enjoyable read
- Volaticus